Jenna was disappointed to find Jackson missing when she returned home, but his note cheered her up some. She knew she needed more time to come up with a reason for leaving so early in the morning. Even after thinking about it the whole drive home the best she could come up with was that she’d gone to the gym, not that she belonged to one.
It was before seven when she got back, so she decided to try to get more sleep. Jenna was exhausted, but sleep didn’t come easily for her. It occurred to her that this ordeal might never be over. She couldn’t keep helping this person without whatever they were doing. She had to do something to stop it.
But what?
She could just picture going to Daniel and Elaine to tell them what she did. Jenna imagined they would be thrilled at the prospect of taking Lana and going into hiding while she went to the police. As she started to doze off, she’d wondered if the police would even believe her. She didn’t believe it herself.
By eleven-thirty, she gave up on sleep and went to her computer. She read through what she’d written on her novel and decided she might spice it up a bit with some of the intrigue going on in her life. Jenna learned long ago that sometimes the most unbelievable situations could wind up a bestseller.
While she was writing, it occurred to Jenna that she could put it all down on paper. She could give it to someone to read and let them know it was a true story. She wouldn’t even change the names. Her mystery man could control what she said, but would have no way of knowing what she wrote. It was all still fresh in her mind and she put every last detail into words before one o’clock.
As it was printing, Jenna debated who she could give it to. Collin had ties to the local police department, but it would look suspicious to anyone watching if she went to him. She could give it to Jackson or to Trista; she trusted them both to help her.
It had to be Trista. Jenna wasn’t ready for Jackson know about this.. He led a normal life, much like she had before this started. How could he ever understand?
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The first two paragraphs pulled me out of the story thread… something didn’t flow…
Time confusion with para 1 and 2 – “… when she returned home…” and then “It was before seven when she got back…”
Maybe – cut sentence 1 paragraph 2 and add the time hack to paragraph 1.
“Jenna was disappointed to find Jackson missing when she returned home just before seven AM…” ??
Para 2 “It was before seven when she got back, so she decided to try to get more sleep. Jenna was exhausted, but sleep didn’t come easily for her.”
maybe?
Her body, leadened with exhaustion, demanded rest, but her brain whirled with questions, worries and negativity.
Just a few ideas where the story thread lost it’s flow.
I hope you don’t mind a few comments or suggestions. I should have done this earlier. Only a few spots have jumped out so far! 
Well, it was about time she put that law school brain of hers to good use…
Damn, awesome thinking Jenna! Very clever
Ok……good idea Jenna….Wondering though…there are obviously hidden cameras throughout her apartment….I’m guessing not precise enough to see exactly what she was typing. I’m guessing that since she is a writer, this would not be suspicious to Chad??
Also….wondering…..has Chad diguised his voice when he calls her??? Otherwise wouldn’t she recognise it????
Gripping stuff hun……sooooo looking forward to more….xxxxxx
Well, I guess we’ll see if it even registers on Chad’s radar or if he thinks her spending time staring at the computer is just par for the course with her.
And, yeah…Either he’s disguising his voice or she has the worst cordless phone connection in the world.