I guess Eric’s got to make up for all the missed fun opportunities from the past 2 years

Eric’s gotta get his fun where he can. Oh, wait…he just had his fun with Scarlet. Anyway. Yes, it’s going to be an interesting conversation. If Price hadn’t already seen Skylar in Jackson’s arms, he probably wouldn’t have believed anything Eric said. But now…who knows?

The only sensible thing for her to do is give the address to Jackson and tell him what she learned. Unfortunately, I don’t remember the last time we could count on Skylar to be sensible. Here’s hoping. Her being there could really throw a wrench in them trying to kill each other. Then again, if I thought my boyfriend was a married con man rapist, I might not be so hot to follow him. (This is why I’d be a crappy book character. I have too much common sense.)

So Eric is setting the stage. I’ve gotta wonder if Price is really just going to fall into his trap like that though. I mean he obviously knows his brother is up to no good, hmm I can’t wait to see how it all pans out!

Mean Eric! Filling Price’s head with some more evil lies about Skylar. When Skyce confront one another it’s going to pretty hilarious! They both have a mile long laundry list of betrayals/accusations to fling at one another…most of which are untrue…at some point it is sure to get confusing for them LOL.

Hmm Skylar might be headed over there all on her own Eric, she’s gotta be thinking about using that address she recovered from Scarlet. But I wonder what Eric’s “trap” is…and hope she doesn’t walk straight into it!

Maybe she’s still processing, not planning. She could still do the right thing and tell Jackson that the father of her child looks like he might be a sadistic rapist. Or she could run off and do something stupid. It’s a coin toss at this point with her.

Unrelated side note: Something’s wrong with my wrist and I can barely type these last few days. Might have to skip LWLU this week if it doesn’t loosen up.

Honestly, I probably won’t even change names all that much. Most of the names are fairly common, so it’s a matter of mainly last names. I think there are chapters where she’s thinking about things that could be condensed to make it flow a little better. For a genre romance or suspense, it’ll be running well over 100,000 words by the time I’m done with it, so a lot could get cut in final edits.

Seems like Skylar might be keeping what she learned in the bathroom to herself…uh oh what is she planning

They are definitely page turners and you’re right…no one is going to complain about a little mid chapter suspense Do you have other print/ebooks out or will this be your first? Definitely let me know when it’s released so I can jump over to amazon (or wherever) and leave you some reviews!

That is such a fantastic idea to release LWLU (but finish it here first!!) That is quite the little twisted masterpiece you have there… And really besides the names and a few small details you barely borrowed from PB at all so you could easily rewrite a few things and voila! *wonders what everyone’s new names will be* … Which parts do you think are draggy? I’ve reread it a few times and I like the whole darn thing… Sometimes I fast forward through a bit of the Sara and Paul watching over Nika and Sucre stuff… But that’s only because I’m very biased and anxious to get to the Mike/Sara drama

That’s what I was thinking. In the Women’s Murder Club books that James Patterson writes, he does a ton of really short chapters, but I was never sure if that worked because he’s a prolific bestselling author. If you’ll notice, I normally try to position my best cliffhangers at the end of the week (at least in this book forward), so I’m hoping none of them would get lost. Besides, any mid-chapter cliffhangers would just be incentive for people to keep turning pages, I think. If I can’t be a bestseller, I at least want to be a page turner.

Oh, I think I’m going to go ahead and release LWLU is book formats after I’m done writing it. I’ll just have to totally rewrite it because it’ll be too long and have some laggy places that need to go.

The short chapters really work great online… I think in print the longer chapters might work better though just cause that is what people expect and are more accustomed to… It might feel a little odd in print to have a new chapter every couple of pages. Only thing is you have such great cliffhangery chapter endings it would be a shame to lose any… But maybe you could “finesse” it as Price would say

Besides, how observant do you really think Skylar was at that moment? I mean…really. She’d been crying and puking not long before leaving for dinner, has been under immense stress and didn’t really sleep well before their road trip. (Dallas to Hot Springs in car=not quick. I’ve made the drive in the heat of summer and it’s miserable.) With all that working against her, I think it’d be expecting too much to hope that she’d notice a slight change in his shade of blonde or eye color from the other side of a restaurant.

I know you desperately want her to instantly realize that Price is innocent, but…*shakes head* It’s not gonna happen. Her last memory of the man is of him shoving her in the cold dirt and driving away, then discovering he’s married. At this point, what wouldn’t she believe about him?

Ooh…it’s the Skyce Drinking Game. Take a shot every time Skylar or Price think the worst of each other. Finish your drink each time one of them does something to make it worse and give the other person a reason to believe terrible things about them. Do a hit of X every time one of them kisses someone else because they’re pissed off at…oh, wait, no. That’s not part of the drinking game. That’s a different novel where people treat drugs like party favors. My bad.

Anyway, in book time, Skylar’s not going to have to dwell on this information for very long. It’s just readers who have her agony drug out for a really long time. *Spoiler Alert* We’re on the last day of the book’s main action. Everything is coming to a head today. Unfortunately, it’s just a day that has a LOT of chapters because a ton of crap always gets crammed into the end of my books. Sorry.

Oh, look. I’ve written an essay in comments again. Might as well go off-topic. If you were to read this in paperbook format, would you prefer the 100+ hort chapters the way it’s broken down for website posting, or would you rather that each book chapter contain multiple – roughly 3-6 – website chapters/scenes? (If it were done that way, basically whatever posts between Monday and Sunday would comprise a chapter of the physical book, if that makes sense.) Reason I ask is that my copy editor for The Freelancer/Agents of Deceit commented that I might want to consider condensing to make it fewer numbered chapters in print.

/End Essay

There was also that scene where Cherry & Chill argue ’cause she has nowhere else to stay but with Raptor…and Chill wants her to stay with him because he doesn’t want her staying with that “monster”….that went down in front of Skylar…but I guess it’s still not enough for her to really “get it” like you said. I guess I had assumed Skylar knew that Raptor and Cherry were sleeping together but she didn’t huh….OH and there was right before Price left her when he asked her if Eric had ever hurt her…I guess that isn’t much either but just a little something…

One more question and I’ll stop bugging you…for now hehe…I could be imagining details ’cause my brain likes to do that, but, wasn’t Eric “disguising” himself as Price as well as impersonating him…like…colored contacts and slightly dyed hair? Feel free to make fun of me if I completely made that up….So when Skylar saw him in the restaurant wouldn’t she have noticed he was in “disguise”, or maybe since she saw him from a distance the changes were subtle enough that she didn’t notice…But maybe that could also tip her off that he was impersonating Price…

Nope. Cherry talked about it to Price when they were alone on the terrace and to Chill when they were at Blaine’s Rain. There was Price’s little freakout to Cherry about how the city wouldn’t be safe for her and her comment about scars, but probably not enough for Skylar to really “get” it. There’s a lot of stuff you as the reader get to know about Eric’s evilry that Skylar isn’t privy to. Pity.

Let’s just say the Skyce reunion has a new layer of WTFery to it after this chapter.

Poor Skyce they never catch a break… And always believing the worst about each other.

There’s that fine line between love and hate…definitely feel where Skylar is coming from… But I hope after her brain marinates in this info for a little while the doubt will creep back in… I mean… A part of her has gotta know Price isn’t capable of that…and Eric IS…arghhhh…

Just think back Skylar…who was coming out of dinner last night? And who has a history of nastiness with the ladies? Raptor! *tries to think if Cherry talked much about her “arrangement” with Raptor in front of Skylar*